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    Amyrillis Shalia
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    Gilgamesh
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    Dancer Lv 80
    Quote Originally Posted by Caity_Cat View Post
    I was hitting text limit in my previous post. >_>; At the risk of being further pedantic by commenting on anything more line-by-line, this is my current version amended with the help of your versions:

    Wandering, I lie
    Too weary and I'm
    too lost to the ice for saving
    My sins cling, binding me
    Eyes fill(ed) with tears
    Her song in my ears
    Broken, faded; how long I have waited to open my eyes

    Turn the light on, know my name
    Won't you turn the light on? (Turn the light on)
    Turn the light on, you know my name
    Asking turn the light on (Turn the light on)
    Turn the light on, can't connect
    'til I turn the light on (turn the light on)
    In solace, far away we look
    Oblivion!

    Falling too far
    Feel the fear and it breaks me
    A voice from the past
    claims that there is no end
    Now a slave to my fate
    I bow down to my weakness
    again and again and again and again, and I'm-

    Falling too fast
    Let the ground overtake me
    A voice from the past echoes on like a drum
    Now there's no more goodbyes
    Though my heart is still aching
    I'll open my eyes one more time, one more time

    Reason resigned
    Dark seasons design
    Spring's promise of sun is honored
    with winter's weight down on us
    Visions in white
    Bold fury in flight
    Clear as diamond
    Yet fragile as always
    My heart is freezing

    Turn the light on, know my name
    Won't you turn the light on? (Turn the light on)
    Turn the light on, you know my name
    Asking turn the light on (Turn the light on)
    Turn the light on, can't connect
    'til I turn the light on (turn the light on)
    In solace, far away we look
    Oblivion!

    Falling too far
    Feel the fealty embrace me
    A voice from the past
    claims again there's no end
    Now enslaved to my fate
    I fall down to my weakness
    again and again and again and again and I'm-

    Falling too fast
    Let the folly now break me
    A voice from the past echoes on like a drum
    Now there's no more goodbyes
    And I'm tired of waiting
    I'll open my eyes one last time
    one more time, one more time
    The only two bits I think might be wrong are:

    "Falling too far
    Feel the fear and it breaks me"


    I could be wrong, but this might be

    "Falling too far
    Feel the fury embrace me"



    The second bit is

    "Now there's no more goodbyes
    And I'm tired of waiting"


    To me, this sounds like

    "Now there's no more goodbyes/Now no more goodbyes/No more goodbyes
    I am tired of weeping"
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    Last edited by Amyrillis; 02-20-2020 at 05:30 PM.

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