Is my story lore-friendly?

[Canadane]

Yay! Thank you for the helpful comment and warm welcome, I'm happy to be among Eorzea's denizens. That is very true that Miqo'te generally don't like the cold climate so I'll try to keep that in mind.

May I interest you in a Glacial Coat?

[Princess_Cassandra]

May I interest you in a Glacial Coat?

I would love to have a warm cozy coat!

[Iscah]

Thanks for the helpful information, I had no idea there were military arts exchanges like that. I'll definitely investigate this Diadem and I look forward to meeting Aymeric whom i hear good things about.

Ohhh - I hadn't realised you aren't actually up to Heavensward at all yet.

There's no sign of the military arts exchange going on beyond those levequest descriptions.

And there's not too much to investigate about the Diadem - I don't think there's any story linked to it. I only got in once and there were lots of FATEs but nothing to specifically do, although I was there for the "gathering" missions rather than the "battle" missions. Anyway, once you'll get to Ishgard you'll see there are a few NPCs at the airship landing, though you can't do anything until you've cleared the Heavensward MSQ. The guy in charge is Aurvael de Haillenarte, second son of the count and one of Francel's older brothers. (Quest script for unlocking access: here)

You'll probably need to organise a trip with FC members if you want to get in, as people don't normally queue for it.



Also, once you get to Ishgard, I guess you'll want to pick up the job quests there - but I'd recommend leaving AST for the moment. I don't know if you've been looking through the discussions here for Ishgard lore, but I'd posted about inconsistencies in the quest timeline - and now we have an official response that some critical facts were mistranslated, and should be fixed in patch 4.5. So it's a good idea to wait until then so you get the corrected version of the story. (Not relevant to your story concept, but just for pursuing Ishgardian lore in general.)

Sorry if this came across as a hand wave. I want to rewrite everything in much greater length and detail soon. I used Haurchefant as an example because he directly goes against the authority of an inquisitor, even openly drawing his sword on temple knights to stand up for what he believed in (Francel's innocence). I used Dark Knights as reference because they often clash with Temple Knights and for similar reasons too. I want Fleurent to be put into a comparable situation but I just do not know the how or the why yet. It's an important moment that I need to get right.

If it's just a placeholder, that's okay then - it just didn't sound like you're still working on it. (I'll admit my own character concepts are in a similar state!)

[Princess_Cassandra]

There's no sign of the military arts exchange going on beyond those levequest descriptions.

And there's not too much to investigate about the Diadem - I don't think there's any story linked to it. I only got in once and there were lots of FATEs but nothing to specifically do, although I was there for the "gathering" missions rather than the "battle" missions. Anyway, once you'll get to Ishgard you'll see there are a few NPCs at the airship landing, though you can't do anything until you've cleared the Heavensward MSQ. The guy in charge is Aurvael de Haillenarte, second son of the count and one of Francel's older brothers. (Quest script for unlocking access: here)

You'll probably need to organise a trip with FC members if you want to get in, as people don't normally queue for it.

Ahh ok, oh well. At least I can still use these parts as evidence of Ishgard working with foreigners.

Also, once you get to Ishgard, I guess you'll want to pick up the job quests there - but I'd recommend leaving AST for the moment. I don't know if you've been looking through the discussions here for Ishgard lore, but I'd posted about inconsistencies in the quest timeline - and now we have an official response that some critical facts were mistranslated, and should be fixed in patch 4.5. So it's a good idea to wait until then so you get the corrected version of the story. (Not relevant to your story concept, but just for pursuing Ishgardian lore in general.)

Ah ok interesting, thank you for the fair warning and I am pleased to hear this is going to get sorted out soon!

If it's just a placeholder, that's okay then - it just didn't sound like you're still working on it. (I'll admit my own character concepts are in a similar state!)

Oh yeah, it is certainly a place holder for now. I want to work on it in earnest after i reach level 60 and don my proper lvl 60 Ishgard esque glamour that my friends helped me create.

With the issues you first mentioned dealt with, does everything else in my concept look acceptable to you?