SE: Please tone it down a hair

[HiirNoivl]

You know what I find wrong?

I find it wrong that you guys think I have a problem with HOW they speak. I don't.

I repeat. There's nothing wrong with how they speak.

The problem is that the paragraphs are not related, they shove dialogue in for lore that's out of context, making the the speech disjointed and hard to read. It's bad storytelling plain and simple. It reads like one person was in charge of every paragraph and never consulted with each other.

There is nothing wrong with how they speak. There's everything wrong with how it's being written.

I'm far more interested in hearing why Nael is present at every primal summoning. Seems to me like he's behind the primal fights and not the beastmen.

Why don't we chat about that, eh, Legatus?

And although you may not need to know his religious leanings... you do know that his philosophical views are important because he's trying to put the motive of the Garlean forces into perspective, right? So we know why they do instead of "just because".

Yeah there's a time and a place for that. But when we're talking about Primals and Dalamud and Garleans and "struggle" x6... you don't think that's a little much?

Too much exposition is just as bad as too little. You overwhelm the audience and lose it.