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  1. 08-24-2013 02:33 AM #10
    Cedri
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    Cedri Vastal
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    Arcanist Lv 60
    No offence or anything, this was quite well done. The only thing is you missed a key ending. As it is now it feels like an afterthought. The only change I would make would be from this:

    Tomorrow I wake refreshed and renewed
    Final Fantasy XIV:ARR this is my ode toward you.

    to this:

    I lay down my body broken and worn
    For tomorrow I wake in this Realm Reborn
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    Last edited by Cedri; 08-24-2013 at 02:45 AM.
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