FFXiv Love Story W/lia - The One

[Synfrag]

I think they are talking about your writing, it's quite awful sentence structure and grammar. But perhaps you are young and undeveloped in that aspect. Or English is not your native language? Either way I have to agree, I'm confused. You have confused me in game too.

As for the video, props on having the cojones to post it. I was not able to watch it in it's entirety either. Even love stories need a sense of adventure, mood or really anything to capture you audience's attention. I felt it lacked this throughout.

For some critique see below.

Setting I understand if you like the Black Shroud but it is a terrible place to do recording, what you end up with is all the clipping and no emotion due to the lack of sun and lighting. Thanalan would have been a much better choice. Think of any awe inspiring movies you may love and imagine them without the mood lighting, sun positions etc. Did I mention the clipping, it is really bad.

Editing Again looking at proper video production from popular movies, you can usually count at least 3 different transition types depending on the scene. I don't see any transitions here, fades, dissolves, sweeps etc. There is also nothing to create any suspense or climax to the story. Maybe add some black and white footage of you dieing or of the love you seek. Otherwise it is quit emotionless.

Technical Try recording at 1/2 frame. Your system apparently cannot handle full frame 1080 recording. If you have a multi-core system you can assign cores to Fraps or your recording software and to the game to physically split the load. I have no clue what you are editing with but try out some filtering, transitions and effects.

It's more of a personal video that, I myself wouldn't share as it has meaning only to you. You did not convey emotion or really anything through this video which means all it is to others is someone recording some video and putting music to it.

F for effect
C for effort
and an A for bravery posting it here!

I hope some of what I have written here will lead you to try some new things in any future videos. If not all you need do is watch your favorite (Live action) movies for reference. Do not reference animation if you are into that because you do not have control over the environment like they do. Like in real life you have no control over your scene when recording game videos.

Cheers!

[Bastok_Iamtheone]

I think they are talking about your writing, it's quite awful sentence structure and grammar. But perhaps you are young and undeveloped in that aspect. Or English is not your native language? Either way I have to agree, I'm confused. You have confused me in game too.

Are you a teacher? How do I know you know the English grammar? Why would I listen to you. Its the first time, that I have seen you.

You are confused because you cannot think as me. YOu are confused that you dont understand what I am telling you. True, that is not exactly right. What is right. Is not entirely wrong and what is wrong is not entirely right. Do you understand that the End is not the end. It really is a begginning. And Vice Versa

Dont you remember the {lifestream} and FFVII. Rarely does someone talk about this. Its is a great Philosophy in the aspect of souls that go and new ones are born. So nothing is lost. why do some of wonder why we have Dejavu's are we really connected in the mind, but we just forgot. Example when we were born, every baby thinks the same. It is when we are brought to the Real-world that our minds go apart. That is the REASON FOR LOVE. LOVE MAKES YOU THINK THE SAME!!

Love is the Conjoining of the Mind as One.......
As you feel with Sex, that is the one time you actual try to think as One. you are inter-minded and that is why you feel what you feel. Love is One MInd.....One Mind The Source remember. Try too

As you were a newborn. LOve is the Source and that is what you continually try to reach and cannot. This is because the Ying and Yang. Ah yes the Chinese, Japanese have got this right. The ever going battle in your mind against Good and Evil thoughts.

Are you confused or are you just waiting for me to tell you more?

Bastok

[Synfrag]

You are confused because you cannot think as me. YOu are confused that you dont understand what I am telling you. True, that is not exactly right. What is right. Is not entirely wrong and what is wrong is not entirely right. Do you understand that the End is not the end. It really is a begginning. And Vice Versa

No actually this is entirely wrong. English, as it is written, is not open to interpretation. It is a structured language with a right way and a wrong way. We choose the words to convey the meaning and feeling and how we write them is the rule.

Regardless, I will relent. I was offering constructive criticism but it seems you lack the comprehension. I will remember in the future not to waste my time commenting on your posts.

[Rhylee_Mau]

No actually this is entirely wrong. English, as it is written, is not open to interpretation. It is a structured language with a right way and a wrong way. We choose the words to convey the meaning and feeling and how we write them is the rule.

Regardless, I will relent. I was offering constructive criticism but it seems you lack the comprehension. I will remember in the future not to waste my time commenting on your posts.

Seems to be the case when people are trying the help/communicate with him. Do yourself a favor and try not to check the other threads. It'll follow the same structure of not making much sense, and somehow twisting what people say. At least this time it's not the sexist "If you're a guy... If you're a girl..." crap.

[Falcus]

Seems to be the case when people are trying the help/communicate with him. Do yourself a favor and try not to check the other threads. It'll follow the same structure of not making much sense, and somehow twisting what people say. At least this time it's not the sexist "If you're a guy... If you're a girl..." crap.

Basically this. Do not read his other threads!

[Bastok_Iamtheone]

Basically this. Do not read his other threads!

Basically what he is saying is uh you need a full mind to read my Posts. haha cant be trying to watch TV. I need your full Attention. Thats what your saying huh Falcon Leader. Right!!

Bastok

[Bastok_Iamtheone]

No actually this is entirely wrong. English, as it is written, is not open to interpretation. It is a structured language with a right way and a wrong way. We choose the words to convey the meaning and feeling and how we write them is the rule.

Regardless, I will relent. I was offering constructive criticism but it seems you lack the comprehension. I will remember in the future not to waste my time commenting on your posts.

You are filled with rage.

hm seems good English to me.

Why do you care?

Do I know you?

No its not a waste of time.

Im sorry. I am just a fighter. I never give up. i like things the hard way. Thats me

I comprehend very well. Your just entertaining me with words as a writer is writing a book.

I get ideas from your writings and characters for that matter. I cant tell if your real or just joking.

so why get offended. Your in a Fantasy world where rules dont apply.

So, dont forget your temper............

Bastok

[Bowen]

Oh lord, here we go.

You are filled with rage.

What rage? She tried to help you, but you just don't seem to understand.

hm seems good English to me.

No, she was right. Even this sentence could be better written as:

Hm. My English seems fine to me.

Im sorry. I am just a fighter. I never give up. i like things the hard way. Thats me

Mhmm. You tell 'em, honey.

I comprehend very well. Your just entertaining me with words as a writer is writing a book. I get ideas from your writings and characters for that matter. I cant tell if your real or just joking. So why get offended. Your in a Fantasy world where rules dont apply. So, dont forget your temper............

Bastok

I just... I can't even...

Edit:
As for your video, I liked the music... I guess?

[Bastok_Iamtheone]

I think they are talking about your writing, it's quite awful sentence structure and grammar. But perhaps you are young and undeveloped in that aspect. Or English is not your native language? Either way I have to agree, I'm confused. You have confused me in game too.

As for the video, props on having the cojones to post it. I was not able to watch it in it's entirety either. Even love stories need a sense of adventure, mood or really anything to capture you audience's attention. I felt it lacked this throughout.

For some critique see below.

Setting I understand if you like the Black Shroud but it is a terrible place to do recording, what you end up with is all the clipping and no emotion due to the lack of sun and lighting. Thanalan would have been a much better choice. Think of any awe inspiring movies you may love and imagine them without the mood lighting, sun positions etc. Did I mention the clipping, it is really bad.

Editing Again looking at proper video production from popular movies, you can usually count at least 3 different transition types depending on the scene. I don't see any transitions here, fades, dissolves, sweeps etc. There is also nothing to create any suspense or climax to the story. Maybe add some black and white footage of you dieing or of the love you seek. Otherwise it is quit emotionless.

Technical Try recording at 1/2 frame. Your system apparently cannot handle full frame 1080 recording. If you have a multi-core system you can assign cores to Fraps or your recording software and to the game to physically split the load. I have no clue what you are editing with but try out some filtering, transitions and effects.

It's more of a personal video that, I myself wouldn't share as it has meaning only to you. You did not convey emotion or really anything through this video which means all it is to others is someone recording some video and putting music to it.

F for effect
C for effort
and an A for bravery posting it here!

I hope some of what I have written here will lead you to try some new things in any future videos. If not all you need do is watch your favorite (Live action) movies for reference. Do not reference animation if you are into that because you do not have control over the environment like they do. Like in real life you have no control over your scene when recording game videos.

Cheers!

hello Syn,

haha thats your name. okay i gave it some thought. right now there is a girl being made and the progress is going well. I will post the progress

FFXiV Love Story {Prologue}

character development

Character : Devine Landstrom

Country : Limsa Lominsa

Height : Average

Eye Color : Brown

Class : Marauder

charasteristics : she has a scar as FFVIII Squall had.

http://www.screencast.com/t/xMWSiurJP

Devine Landstrom {Marauder} - Limsa Lominsa
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=NiiWl0YNaCs

Bastok

[Bowen]

charasteristics : she has a scar as FFVIII Squall had.

MY SIDES.
/10characters