Quote Originally Posted by Lanadra View Post
Some real bitterness you got going on there.
Dunno what you mean. I'm a ray of sunshine. Reflected from the blade of a guillotine.

Quote Originally Posted by Lanadra View Post
You ever heard of 'immersion' and 'flavouring'?
Yeah, I also know if you put too much chile in your tacos you're bound to have a bad time (not from personal experience, mind you).

You know a thing that can break your "immersion"? Stopping to re-read a sentence multiple times before moving on. Having hiccups in your story and having it harder to swallow than it needs to be.