A Writing Project (More Like a Rewrite)

Evening, everyone! A while back, I've written a Final Fantasy XIV related story about my character's history. It was a decent hit, which surprised me (I was also surprised by the random tells I received about it). However, after a couple of classes, I began to become more aware of my writing style. After the first week of my new class (it's called Place and Setting), and after just one reading assignment, I reread my manuscript and found that... well it kind of sucked. In the end of it all, I disliked it. So, I thought about it, and since it has been the only worked I ever completed in my lifetime, I decided to rewrite the entire thing.

So I want to hear more opinions! Basically, it's about Talia's history and self-discovery. Her life could most likely be equated to Lara's Worst Day Ever Tomb Raider. As an English major, I hope to tug on the heartstrings of my fellow audience and be able to invoke some emotion and connections.

So here's the link:

http://lodestone.finalfantasyxiv.com...entry?e=462108

I urge you to give it a read. Just a few minutes of your time. If you hate it, you hate it, but this is a test of my own skills as an author, so all help is appreciated!

Thanks!

I like a fan made story, so i've bookmarked it in order to read it later (it's past midnight already). I've made a "little" story about my FFXI character once (i believe i got to 40 pages) and when i write something on the forum or the blog, i want to write it in a "story telling fashion" as well.

I'd say, give this blog post a read if you're interested:

http://lodestone.finalfantasyxiv.com...cicuid=3432550

Looking very forward to seeing the new story unfold Taly :3. As always, I'll be cheering you on. XD I'm probably going to have to get fanclub T-shirts and Hat's made at this point hehe.