Evening, everyone! A while back, I've written a Final Fantasy XIV related story about my character's history. It was a decent hit, which surprised me (I was also surprised by the random tells I received about it). However, after a couple of classes, I began to become more aware of my writing style. After the first week of my new class (it's called Place and Setting), and after just one reading assignment, I reread my manuscript and found that... well it kind of sucked. In the end of it all, I disliked it. So, I thought about it, and since it has been the only worked I ever completed in my lifetime, I decided to rewrite the entire thing.

So I want to hear more opinions! Basically, it's about Talia's history and self-discovery. Her life could most likely be equated to Lara's Worst Day Ever Tomb Raider. As an English major, I hope to tug on the heartstrings of my fellow audience and be able to invoke some emotion and connections.

So here's the link:

http://lodestone.finalfantasyxiv.com...entry?e=462108

I urge you to give it a read. Just a few minutes of your time. If you hate it, you hate it, but this is a test of my own skills as an author, so all help is appreciated!

Thanks!