"Actually I said "University Material" better check that again."
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>_O Whoever said I was a ma'am?!
Hmmm! well!!!!
Can you put this music on:http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Q8TshU_nGZA
With a CG heart spinning in the foreground, and a flashing checker pattern background and with some bonus features. Like, the script, the voice acting, concept art and videos of the chick. Maybe some videos of Elvis doing "Jailhouse Rock"...
and... I want in big, neon pink cursive letters across the top with a baby yellow outline: "The Love Story of Bastok Iamtheone: FANTASY IS THE ONLY OPTION... and then there was love"
tell me what you think! Thanks~
EDIT: OH OH! Can you please add in a block buster logo?!
Can I have this video on DVD to show to a college professor and see what he thinks? This is a true work of art. The camera angles were top notch and while you saw no face of the character, you just knew....just knew how he was feeling. Never before has something this artistic hit me so hard.
You sir, are a true work of art.
http://cdn.head-fi.org/2/2c/2cda10c2_slow-clap.gif
Okay, how can i get Critism, and apllaudience for this at the same time. Hmmm okay another Dvd, sent to whom? Where?
I better get a www., something. I didnt know how far this could go....
Bastok
KINDERGARTEN LOVE 101.
Bastok, trust me when I say this: I am not one to brag. I hate bragging, I think it stunts development, same with unnecessary praise.
I am in AP English as a Freshman. "University material," my butt. Not even Einstein would be able to decipher your "writing." Not because it's so AMAZING WOW YOUR THINKING IS OUT OF THIS WORLD. Bastok, you have a terrible understanding of grammar and that's that. Your writing does not make any sense, and it is physically painful to read it most of the time.
I will write you a short love story or something of the like, if you so please, and I will show you what I am capable of and what a decent piece of work looks like. I'm not trying to brag. I'm trying to help because you might just possibly have a sliver of potential underneath all that ego.
tl;dr: Bastok, your writing sucks and you don't understand grammar very well. I am willing to teach you to write better if you want to. But drop the ego, man. Egos stunt development.
(honestly I think Bastok needs Grammar 101)