As far as drawling skills go then I think u did a good job, the coloring is good and the detail is good, so youre a very good drawler, u got talent.

The theme though confuses me, what am I looking at ?, at first I thought maybe it's a father lala and little daughter relaxing, then I was like he looks to young to be her dad so maybe it's a really affectionate brother sister lala.

I could see where people would get pedo vibes but I choose to believe that's not what you are going for, so I'm gonna stick to my guns and say it's a lala brother and his little lala sister having a heart filled platonic brother sister moment.