I agree with a lot of what you said. I admit I don't like the Chakra system. If they introduced a more steady and reliable way to get Chakra other than crits having a chance to give Chakra then that would be good! But that would basically be my Enlightenment system.
I feel like the raise actually would be OK for a few reasons. RDM gets access to a raise and I believe Summoner still has it as well. These are both DPS roles same as Monk. Monks have always been mystical so I don't think it would be as absurd as giving a raise to a DRG. What would make the ability balanced is the fact that the Monk has to give up DPS in order to use the skill, and it has a very long CD. You could potentially keep the res sickness, but the self res I feel is something the game doesn't have. A raise on a 3 minute cooldown, and needing the resources to do it, is not as good as what casters already have, so getting rid of the sickness helps balance that out.