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    Eloah's Avatar
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    Jan 2015
    Location
    Gridania
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    Character
    Toki Tsuchimi
    World
    Siren
    Main Class
    Scholar Lv 100

    Red Mage minion text issue

    So we all got the RDM minion and love it, but the text is a little off. The text reads as follows.

    Tales of mages dabbling in the schools of both black and white abound, but most end in the adept realizing that she should have focused on a single art rather than allowing hubris to drive her to believe that she might excel in both.
    At first glance it might seem fine, or that I am pointing out the gender being female, nope. (Don't think anyone cares about the gender) The issue is the perspective, it goes from 3rd person plural perspective to 3rd person singular perspective. Either, the beginning of the paragraph needs to reflect the 3rd person perspective, or the gender pronouns need to be replaced with the gender neutral they/them.

    Minor edit by adding plural and singular to the respective perspectives.

    Fixed the numbers, I wrote 2nd, instead of 3rd, for the she, which is rarely 2nd.
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    Last edited by Eloah; 04-14-2018 at 06:47 AM.
    I like helping people with their Job ideas, it's fun to help them visuallize and create the job they'd like to play most. Plus I make my own too, I'll post them eventually.