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    Quote Originally Posted by Kotei View Post
    No I am English and I am very dyslexic. I also know for a fact that the only way to truly hold a language is to constantly use it and expand upon it. You say it's excruciating to read and I will say your response is appalling to hear. I do not use a thesaurus so all these words are ones I know. I'm sorry you feel everyone is in need of a book to pull "elaborate" words from. As for purple text prose..... Ha, purple text disgust me... I would never stoop so low. Purple text is only for emotes never quotes. Are you really that long winded you must quote yourself... NPC don't even do that.
    First let me say that you type well for someone who is dyslexic; very few grammatical or spelling errors. I genuinely mean that, learning disabilities are a PitA. But, as you said that you are definitely an English speaker then there are a few things I want to say. I know that constructive criticism might be ‘appalling to hear’ as I have no intention of sugar coating things, but you should know that really am trying to help you.

    I assumed you were either using a thesaurus or something like google translate because while many of the words that were peppered throughout your posts were technically synonyms of or simply similar to other, more common words that would have made perfect sense the context that you used them, they themselves were completely wrong when used in the same place.

    Quote Originally Posted by Kotei View Post
    steadfast ideas
    Is a good example of this. It’s fairly easy to figure out what you were trying to convey through the use of context clues, but 'steadfast' is still very poorly used in this phrase. I assume you wanted to convey that the ideas were long-held or enduring, but steadfast is more commonly used to describe a person or thing that is loyal or dependable. Are the ideas you are referring to loyal or dependable?

    Later in that same post, your use of heresy was also not technically correct. In common speech, heresy almost exclusively refers to something that flies in the face of a religious doctrine. The only really applicable use outside of this is for dramatic purposes- you want to place the severity of the divergence of the opinions you are talking about on the same level as religious heresy. If you were attempting to use it to dramatic effect, then I apologize as it would be correct, just incredibly melodramatic.

    Quote Originally Posted by Kotei View Post
    inserting a polite propagation just shows poor mannerisms
    This entire section of your closing sentence is absolutely not something you would ever hear in everyday speech and really just reads like you were trying very hard to sound educated. ‘Inserting’ conveys the idea of ‘adding’ or ‘contributing’ without actually being a word that would normally be used in the manner in which you attempted to. ‘Propagation’ also has no place in this sentence (it makes even less sense after your use of ‘inserting’.) I understand that you were somehow or other trying to convey the idea of politely spreading or generating conversation, but this sentence is so mangled I’m not even sure how I would edit it to fix it so that it makes sense without starting over from scratch. ‘Mannerisms’ is plain, flat-out wrong here. ‘Manners’ as in etiquette is the word you were looking for but has absolutely nothing to do with ‘manners’ as in behavioral traits, gestures, ways of speaking, or mannerisms.

    I picked this particular post apart because it was short but still had several of the key problems that were repeated over and over throughout the rest of your posts. When taken all together, the examples I gave above give the strong impression of one of three possibilities –
    You are using either google translate or an English-to-other language dictionary which would have lacked the subtleties to differentiate between these words and phrases that I pointed out and their more correct synonyms and uses. You said English was your first language so this is ruled out.

    You are extensively using a thesaurus to look up more impressive-sounding versions of commonplace words but are also, like with a translator books, not grasping the subtle differences in usage. You, again, stated that this wasn’t the case.

    You are aware enough of the words to recognize them or know of their existence, but your grasp of them is too loose and you are not familiar enough with their usage to be able to correctly put them into context. This is the only situation that makes any sense to me at this point and, if it is the case, then the good news is that you are half way there. Knowing bigger, less commonly used words is half the battle; you just need to work on understanding them better, especially their subtle differences to everyday words. With a bit of practice you should be able to use them properly.

    I know this is a big post to shift through, but I hope you did as I was genuinely trying to help you improve your writing. That being said, I should add that ‘purple prose’ has nothing to do with text or emotes. It is a writer’s term for a style of writing that is overly flowery and showy to the point where it adds nothing to the piece of writing except making it harder to read and understand.
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