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    Gridania, Adders' Nest -- Text -- Sondraix's Incorrect Comma -- "recruit, Mermentia"

    When the player is in the Adders' Nest in Gridania and speaks to Sondraix before joining a Grand Company, the following text appears:

    "
    Sondraix: Ah, you are the recruit,
    Mermentia, are you not? As you
    have yet to officially enlist, you
    are still free to join the
    Maelstrom and Immortal Flames
    as a recruit, as well. I encourage
    you to do so. There is much and
    more of this realm you ought
    see.
    "

    This is incorrect because a comma should not appear after the word "recruit" on the first line of text. The name "Mermentia" is restrictive in this case, and it adds essential information to the noun "recruit". Adding the comma implies that Mermentia is the only recruit that the Order of the Twin Adder has.

    Please fix this issue by removing the comma that follows "recruit".

    The corrected text would read as follows:

    "
    Sondraix: Ah, you are the recruit
    Mermentia, are you not? As you
    have yet to officially enlist, you
    are still free to join the
    Maelstrom and Immortal Flames
    as a recruit, as well. I encourage
    you to do so. There is much and
    more of this realm you ought
    see.
    "
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    Unless it's supposed to be a noun of direct address, maybe. Unfortunately, there's no way to tell from the context. . .
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    Here's a good rule of thumb I use for this, Viridiana:

    My sister Jessica loves the moon. (Implies you have more than one sister.)
    My sister, Jessica, loves the moon. (Implies she is your only sister.)

    And this NPC is definitely referring to the player by the title of "recruit". That's not even a question. Because otherwise it reads horribly awkwardly, since he'd be calling you "the recruit," which makes zero sense.
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    Quote Originally Posted by Mermentia View Post
    Please fix this issue by removing the comma that follows "recruit".
    Comma removed for a future patch. Thanks, Merm!
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