Hmmm, you should adjust <s.e>'s at the end to make a proper song, and don't forget the "/dance! /dance! Show me that you good enough!"
I also see that you don't have any CD or Mudras in there and I sincerely believe that this is the right thing to do. Because this stuff is like for pussies and as far as I can see you ain't playing no female Miqo'te so you shouldn't even use them in the first place. Keep up the good work!