Quote Originally Posted by Amyrillis View Post
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To me, this sounds like

"Now there's no more goodbyes/Now no more goodbyes/No more goodbyes
I am tired of weeping"
I'm not sure about the "feel the fury embrace me" one, that line is just really hard to hear in general, though I can def hear the "embrace me" in it, so you might be on the right track.

I think you definitely might be onto something with "weeping" on this line! Gonna incorporate that into my document.


Quote Originally Posted by Hikiopoltsh View Post
Ice like her tears
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A slave to my fight

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Echoes out like a drum roll
There's no more goodbyes
These parts sound like they might work. "Roll" with soft pronunciation+effects over it could come across as "now" to the ear.