FFXIV Some-what Interactive Manga

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Darnus was very hard to draw :c

Sorry these are taking so long. Very hard to draw during the week due to such short time I have between when I wake up and work.

I know I need some character development. The only reason I have included other characters is that no one one goes "Why didn't you put me in it?" Then I would feel terrible. I'll just have to suck it up I guess.

But what do you guys think so far? Any comments/critiques/suggestions?

Personally I think it's too compact, but it's just a small comic so it's kind of to be expected. But the art is really unique looking and I like that.

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Originally Posted by AmyNeudaiz

Personally I think it's too compact, but it's just a small comic so it's kind of to be expected. But the art is really unique looking and I like that.

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I have to agree, btw this is just constructive criticism :-)

#1 Order - Was hard to follow & I don't read manga, right to left up to down if that's how u want it read, isn't my norm.
#2 Text Length - Mostly browsed the pictures as following the story was a bit hard & some pages had a bit too much text for a comic strip.
#3 Fav Image - Page1 with a closeup of your character was my fav image, rly nice drawing, overall nice drawing.
#4 Fav Page - The page w/ darn for me was overall best page, right amount of text, showed great action & pleasing to the eyes.

Overall: Nice work, maybe less text, portray ur story w/ ur pictures. Good art & coloring ^_^

For those confused on how to read it.

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Jin... I love you... <3

:D I rove you Rikk

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For those who may be curious, the thing on the bottom panel near Kouji's face, is his chocobo's tailfeathers.

Anyway, sorry I took a long break, I will try to keep at this.

Next Poll:
A- Follow Jinrya
B- Follow Kouji

Dead Line by the 12/15/2012 at 2 am est.

B /10invisiblecharacters

Made a mistake with the the date, meant the 15th. So there is still time for more votes.

AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAH!

Bitches and hoes.

A

You draw is very nice and story is being fun overall (and I read manga a lot and to say that means you have talent). Keep the good work :D

PS: I wonder if in the middle of history you will make this going into events before ARR ^^

Only time will tell :3

So far it's a tie.

I vote again for B. O.o"

You can only vote once!

Need a tie breaker.

b...... is my vote

Ok Kouji's path. I shall start tonight, should have it done by 7 am or sometime after midnight tomorrow.

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I expected more tomberries

I feel like I have been issued a challenge.

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LMAO pretty hard at the Metal Gear Solid reference XD especially with him not being able to reach the picture XD

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Your comics are great! ^_^